Topic: Should uniforms be made compulsory
in schools?
My original opinion: No
Many students
complain about their school making them wear uniforms every morning. They claim
that school uniforms are inconvenient and nothing more than a mere pretense.
However, after careful consideration, those students will learn that they have
been futilely muttering against a rule that is in fact very beneficial and
helpful.
Wearing uniforms
definitely provide adequate school environment. Students, especially when they
are in middle or high school, can be overly interested in appearances. Adolescents
are indeed very sensitive to peers and they pay careful attention to how others
look like. Such obsession toward appearances can make students not concentrate
on their academics, but rather put tremendous effort on fashions even when they
go to school. By making students wear uniform, school can prevent such problem because
they would not think about what to wear before going to school. Plus, they
would not compare what they wore with what others wore since uniforms are all
the same.
I get 1023 characters in Word, and some grammatical issues showing up over green lines. Not a big deal, but you have to be meticulous in these short exercises where quality is the focus of quantity. In terms of structure, I think you have to make your opinion clear in the first paragraph itself, and THEN move into the rational argument against in a single second paragraph - as outlined in class. Not bad, but do consider the prompt more closely.
답글삭제As for the content of your counter argument, very good. Need more of your true opinion however.